My first original track (feedback please)

[Squashed_Fly]

I got asked recently if I had any original material that I could do by a guy who wanted to book me.

At the time, the answer was no, so I decided to get busy writing some. With a bit of help from Jen (who is a much better lyricist than I'll ever be!), I have a couple or 3 songs, this is the first one that is put together. Done using Garage Band for the ipad, together with the Jam interface for my guitars, I'm quite pleased with it.

Hope you like!

[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RsR_n85CTes[/media]

If anyone is interested, I'm playing at The Royal Oak in Old Town this Saturday as well from 8:30, where this will get its first public outing!

[Swanny]

Sounds pretty dam good to me [smiley=thumbup.gif]

[Squashed_Fly]

Apparently its a bit loud! lol

Don't know why, it sounded fine on the ipad!

[wiltshire builders]

Sounds very much like the Finn brothers, fan of crowded house maybe?

Very impressive. Keep 'em coming!

[Col]

Yeah Fly very good.

I know nowt but perhaps bring solo forward to 1:58 seconds and cut out about 20 secs of repeating lyrics and remove the 'forgot' pause @2:22
--just needs some minor fix stuff imo
bloody good tho

[Mitch9128]

Well, Susan Boyle made it

[Squashed_Fly]

Well, Susan Boyle made it

;D ;D ;D ;D

[Harry87]

Bit of inspiration from Guns N' Roses perhaps? Sounded a lot like http://youtu.be/zRIbf6JqkNc ESPECIALLY the introduction ;D

[Toph]

A bit sugary for me... but you sang it well mate!!

[goz1960]

I liked it?.